Here's my latest film. I think it's an interesting concept with a pretty experimental feel. It's one of the few films that I have that's under 10 minutes. In fact, it's under 7. So should I send it to Tisch?

Check it out:
http://www.the-technique.com/movie2.php?id=50

Or direct link:
http://www.the-technique.com/movies/SpaceFinalOrigLg_Prog.mov

Ehhh.

Okay. Hmm. Personally, I would not send it to Tisch. But I also, from my own standpoint, listen to what anyone else said about MY own movie, so I wouldn't take what anyone says on this too seriously. Go with YOUR instincts.

Here's why I don't like it.
1) Never saw the movie "Stay Alive" but I felt from the preview of that movie, that yours shared a striking similarity.
2) I think the acting/dialogue could have been MUCH better.
3) This is really anal, but I just like how this is a scary dream and there are pretty Christmas lights on some of the houses.
4) The end wasn't clear. I think it needed to be.

Okay, there are some things I do like.
1) SOME of the shots seemed really well thought out. Overall, Cinematography was impressive.
2) For what it was, it was overall well executed.
3) You have a nice camera, don't you?
4) The alarm clock is so big and goofy, I LOVE IT.


Okay... But seriously. Scary movies aren't my style, so I think right off the bat I may be over-nit-picky. Also, like I said before, if you like it, and feel confident with it, and it is your latest, don't hesitate on ANY comment you may get. Does this piece demonstrate you as an artist the best? If so, screw all the other pretentious people on this site and send the thing. You may get in.

That whole paragraph in other words: Don't worry yourself to death about what other people think of YOUR work like I do. It isn't healthy.

But... yea it was good.

Tyler

I wouldn't send it as it is, but I think it's a re-edit away from a viable Tisch submission.

It gets a little long and boring in certain parts. You usually bring us back into it soon after that happens, but I think you can tighten it without losing the flow. I know you're probably sick of editing it, but I think it shows definite potential. I'd suggest cutting the middle down, mostly. I think the film starts off beautifully and then loses some of that punch, which I think you can fix. I liked it, overall.

A few things I'd mention are that as Night said, the acting isn't wonderful and the ending is a little murky. I got what you were trying to say, but I don't think you want to rely on admissions people giving you the benefit of the doubt. Maybe there were other shots from that location that could clear it up a bit?

P.S. the scene with the people in the pool was one of the creepiest I've seen in a student film. I liked that...I just didn't like the lead up to it. Came out of nowhere and the cinematography broke down a bit just before.

Still tho, I really like it. Good luck.

I didnt see all of it, but from what I did see:

you need to keep the monsters hidden from the viewer as long as possible. Keep them guessing and fearing what they can't see...it's a genius way to scare the crap out of little kids. you need to add suspense. The part where he's in the car wasn't scary. You were trying to make that scary, but the monster is fully visible to the viewer. They're both in the camera shot at the same time and it just isnt scary. The music you added to make it scary doesnt work in this case.

There are two ways to go about horror movies: 1) very raw and crude with just people getting stabbed and ****. 2) much smarter way, keep the viewer thinking theres something there, keep them on their edge of their seat and waiting for something. When the guy gets in the car. Have him pause. FEEL someone next to him. He looks over ... nothing there. So he turns the car and then, BAM! you ****ing pop up the monster. That'll get the viewer.

So you just have to pick one of those ways. Right now...it isnt scaring me. I dont mean to be an ass-hole. I'm trying to help.

I liked the crisp camera work though. That's a nice camera you have. your shots looked good to. id say you could re-shoot a little and it would work as a submission film. good luck!

What CAMERA did you use? TELL ME!

To Efren.

There is a difference between scary and creepy. I think he went for creepy. And he did succeed in that.

Tyler

I think people are being a bit harsh on the film. I agree some points, the acting was pretty unbelievable, but I almost forgot about that because of the amazing cinematography. Some of the scenes that stood out in my mind:

-When he's walking down the street and the lone street light provides the lighting for the entire scene

-The wide shot of the pool where the steam is slowly rising up

-I also liked the clock transition a lot in the beginning, very 2001-esque.

I was hoping you'd put the music credits at the end though, anyway you could say what songs you used? I really liked them.

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Originally posted by Palm Tree Armada:
I wouldn't send it as it is, but I think it's a re-edit away from a viable Tisch submission.

I agree.

Tyler

Mmmmm, it's not bad! =)

But yeah, the dialogues can definitely be improved upon. They're not very... natural, so to speak?