i know theres alot wrong with it but please comment and help me improve

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I was an attempt. If I were you, I'd go back and look at your script. The script makes the movie. Download the scriptwriting software Celtx (www.celtx.com) it's free, it's easy and it's awesome. At the opening screen, look for the "Samples" and learn how to format scripts using the examples they provide. -- Think of every shot like a painting. There should always be artistic balance i.e. the focus being center top and bottom. More advanced directors know how to use imbalance to add an uneasy feeling. -- As a director you should be able to spot and correct if an actor/actress isn't acting correctly (looking at the camera, smiling when they should be scared, etc.). The actor can't see themselves so it's your job to call a re-shoot even if it requires a hundred takes. All in all, good job. I look forward to hearing your comments on my stuff when I finally get around to posting them.

Thanks

haha "did you pay the electric bill!?"
good stuff man.
watch out for camera noise if your not using an off-board microphone, make sure your lens cap is secured to the band.