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Thriller film added by Jacob Crow, Apr 25, 2018
Pros - Built tension well!
Intriguing kept me watching!
Cons - Minor improvements on the technical aspect of the cinematography were needed.
The music wasn't subtle enough.
I am writing this review because I think that this concept short is exciting and there are only a few things would be needed to make it polished.
The first thing that I would like to address is the music, it was generic and took to much control of the emotion of the piece. If there were no music/bass rumble, to begin with, and only foley/soundscape it would build atmosphere much quicker and more efficiently. Here is an excellent video essay on how to use audio to build tension. Then at the climax add some subtle not to controlling music.
The next thing I want to address is the color grade. I feel that the protagonist's face wasn't light properly. It would have been nice to have some soft wrapping backlight on one side of his face to mimic the sunset, but because it wasn't shot that way you might consider relighting in post-production (or completely silhouette him). Another thing is there is a beautiful sunset with the blue dusk sky, with only a few tweaks to the color grade that blue cast could pop and make it a much more cinematic color pallet.
Overall Great Piece! Sincerely,
Pros - great use of dramatic effect
The cinematography was on point and tension was built well. Great use of dramatic effect, sound effects were used at perfect timing. The overall editing was well done. The acting was good although there were moments the actors expressions did not seem convincing.
Pros - Cinematogrhapy, Editing and Script.
Cons - Lighting, Story telling with shots.
Great cinematogrhapy, nice editing and good 1 min script!
For the next time you direct 1 min script, think about every shot.
How can you use them to tell the story, how can you promote the plot.
You made cool thriller and hidden space, but maybe you could have given up for the walking shots that spend half time from the 1 min and replace them with more intersting shots.
Good work, and Good Luck!