Parallel universe and two buddies
: A good set up to pick up the pace with the inciting moment, and propel both characters into motion.
: Show more visuals and information on the genre (universe).
In ten minutes you did a great job characterizing the two actor's current circumstance as students who are worried and anxious of their obligations to attend a class, and lack of information on the mysterious force in the universe. The way you divided the friends with different internal states that distracted one character with thoughts of dance and woman.Which led to a bout of unconsciousness ,and showed the other character a little more in control as he receives update
