The coffee mix-up at start was fun and well-written. I laughed out loud at the line "My name is Sam Too...tee...oh...oh..." and though it was going to continue in the same way (comedic), which I would have enjoyed.
The switch over to the dramatic / serious style instead was a change of gears.
The middle animation, showing times and life events passing was a little jarring due to suddenly being an animation and later returning to be a film. Would have been better to shoot little 3 second clips of birthdays, guilty pleasures, meeting girlfriend etc. Choice of music seemed too sad for that 'life happening' sequence.
Although the points about life that 'Mr. Wisdom' were making were good and relevant for your university students, they seemed a little labored and trite the way they were delivered (like he was reading off motivational posters). The ladder analogy too was a good one, lerting go the rungs to move up etc. but again seemed a bit finger wagging and heavy. Could have been delivered in a lighter way. Also the score music in the background on the rooftop seemed inappropriate.
Overall, it was very well shot, good camera work and audio was very clean and well executed. That beautiful shot of the landscape and university could have been used more, maybe as an establishing shot at start right before he orders his coffee.
Thank you for sharing it here with us all on the StudentFilms website!
Please feel free to check out my own short film here on the Studentfilms.com website: https://www.studentfilms.com/showcase/do-you-want-to-buy-some-cookies-short-film.178/
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The switch over to the dramatic / serious style instead was a change of gears.
The middle animation, showing times and life events passing was a little jarring due to suddenly being an animation and later returning to be a film. Would have been better to shoot little 3 second clips of birthdays, guilty pleasures, meeting girlfriend etc. Choice of music seemed too sad for that 'life happening' sequence.
Although the points about life that 'Mr. Wisdom' were making were good and relevant for your university students, they seemed a little labored and trite the way they were delivered (like he was reading off motivational posters). The ladder analogy too was a good one, lerting go the rungs to move up etc. but again seemed a bit finger wagging and heavy. Could have been delivered in a lighter way. Also the score music in the background on the rooftop seemed inappropriate.
Overall, it was very well shot, good camera work and audio was very clean and well executed. That beautiful shot of the landscape and university could have been used more, maybe as an establishing shot at start right before he orders his coffee.
Thank you for sharing it here with us all on the StudentFilms website!
Please feel free to check out my own short film here on the Studentfilms.com website: https://www.studentfilms.com/showcase/do-you-want-to-buy-some-cookies-short-film.178/
Thanks
