'UnStrung' - (16mm Black and White Short Film)

We needed to see the boy struggle a little more at the start to feel his nerves. Once he was on stage a few cutaways of audience members looking on in anticipation and the boys' nervous response would help. The sound design was good but the mix was a little off. Needed a more muffled tone for the audience when he was backstage. Audience clapping and a confident performer passing him as he went on stage to build he nerves. In the park the ambience of the birds was nice but a mixed a little too loud. Overall, a good short film.

Beautifully done in black and white! Really appreciate the camera angles and no dialogue of the short film. Really captured the idea of the musician behind closed doors. I also got out of it the, "Open Mic" stage set for all to see is a look at in-balance between what you think is fame or fans are suppose to give you. However, I would of liked his guitar playing to be high in volume, higher up in the mix to clearly demonstrate is playing abilities.

The introduction could've display the leading up to his performance better in my opinion.

A glance or look at the audience expression would've made his stage fright scene more believable to me.

She Could've looked out onto the stage to try to encourage him. I think that would've made the scene more interesting.

I liked how she seemed to have more confidence in him than he did in himself.

I like how she showed that she still believed in his talent and ability.

I liked how her expressions told me she was with him through it all.

Overall I think it was an excellent short film.